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The Guava Tree

Katha Sagar The Guava Tree

It was all about that ominous, odd-looking guava tree which created such a hue and cry in my household. There it stood, sturdy and robust, close to the boundary wall, just in front of the main door of my building. I don’t know when it sprouted, but it all came out of its own and I first felt its abrupt existence when it took a visible shape, two years ago. It was just a tender sapling, shooting its sumptuous pair of stems up the wall. In those days I could not resist the temptation to look at its green and slender shape. It bewitched my attention time and again. Was it the poet in me or the love for the innocents that pulled me down to the steps? There I would squat for hours together, watching and mulling over that mysterious plant alone. And what were my reflections? Perhaps I was dreaming of a time when it would acquire a pleasant shape with big ripe fruits hanging all over and casting a soothing shade around. How poetic!

Yes. My musings came true. Now it grew so big and wide that its thick dark foliage made a perpetual canopy over the whole yard and half of the roof. Except summer, the land under it always remained damp and soggy. Big luscious fruits studded its branches all the year round. At first we ate the fruits eagerly but very soon all became sick of them. It seemed none could finish the fruits. Fresh flowers adorned the branches and brought further new fruits while others got matured, ripened and fell. During night, the nocturnal creatures made a delicious feast of them, dropping heaps of half-eaten snippets on the ground under. The fruits piled on the damp land of the yard and stank. Flies swarmed and buzzed all round, giving a sinister look to my front veranda. My wife became tired of clearing and tidying them up each morning. We happily allowed our neighbouring children to pluck and devour them. The children appeared, off and on, and especially in the early afternoon when my wife would have a sweet snooze and disturbed her out of the happy reverie. She endured it silently because we wanted to get rid of those ominous fruits. But the fruits seemed to be inexhaustible; the more we plucked the more they grew. My wife spent a good part of her valuable time to pluck a bagful of them and presented them to whoever guest visited us.

Though all these tedious business cost a lot and paid nothing in return, yet we did it. The whole purpose was to remove the fruits and keep the yard clean. But the undaunted spirit of the tree seemed to read our thoughts. Every time we plucked and vacated the branches, the tree replenished the loss with a fresh supply. So ultimately we gave up fighting and accepted defeat. It was then that my wife and I took a stern decision- cut down the tree- a nip in the bud. No tree no fruits. And that’s all about it.

The next Sunday morning, an axe was asked for and I resolutely got ready to chop up the tree. But as I raised the axe, my attention was distracted to a shrill creak at the gate. It was the milkman who burst out showing his betel-red row of teeth.

“Are you up to pluck the guavas, sir? What an amazing lush of a tree! The guavas so delicious! I want some of them. May I have them sir?”

“O, yes, yes, of course! As many as you like.” I said. The axe dropped from my hand. The man climbed up the tree, while I got busy in the household.

In the afternoon when I tried for the second time, the same interruption occurred by an unexpected visitor. The whole day went futile without being able to sever it down.The next day I went to my office as usual but all through the day, my mind was heavy with the image of that tree. It was all the while busy, drawing up conclusions and consequences. In the evening, when I returned to my morbid home, I found my wife crumpled with perplexity. I decided to finish up the job in the darkness of the night.

Late in the night, when the whole world was asleep, I woke up once for all. Hurricane in hand, my wife came by as I seized up the axe and made for the tree stealthily. In a realm of quietness, the tree seemed to be in deep slumber. A queer serenity had descended into its fruit burdened foliage. With murder in heart, I raised the axe. For, I wanted to give it a sure and a final blow. “Thud”… “thud”… a something heavy and mysterious jumped down.

“Oh..h..h..h, ghost, ghost”, yelled my wife and in a great fright she hurtled back. The hurricane was flung to a distance and shattered. It was darkness again. I could not see exactly what it was. But, ultimately, I realized that there was something, some invisible spirit that was trying to safeguard the tree.

Being overpowered once again, I tuned back to my room and tried to have a wink of sleep, forgetting the whole business. But there in the yard and in my mind the tree stood obdurate and invincible. I was too perturbed to sleep and could only lay awake in my bed.

“Thud”…”thud” the sound came again. Being curious I opened the window out into the Moonlit night. Ah! What did I see? Among the thick foliage of the guava tree, were hundreds of bats, hanging in snooze after a bellyful of the dinner. From the secured niche of my window, a big wild cat stalked and jumped frantically at them, only to thud back on the ground. The bats perched themselves safely, high in their arboreal abode, far out of its ferocious reach. Far from being scared, they seemed to rest in unruffled slumber. What a nice home to sleep in!

Soon as the day dawned, the bats flapped out of their nocturnal cradle and vanished in the hazy sky above. The cat retreated back to the dark alcove in search of mice. The guava tree stood vacant for a few moments, only to burst out again into a busy market with the approach of morning light. Numerous birds, nameless but cute, arrived from all directions and occupied its tender boughs. The squirrels squeaked up and down the tree. Flies, insects and bees buzzed around and whizzed in noisy circles. The butterflies flapped their vibrant wings. A bedlam of twitters, squeals, scampers and numerous sly rustles filled the air. The vibrations of life pervaded into all directions, declaring its undying existence.

I had not witnessed such a vivacious society as I saw now. Just beyond my window was flickering an endless play of life! A callous man I was, to be proud of my concrete building that accommodated a few of us. But this poor guava tree that was to receive a brutal blow of my axe, was in fact, a gigantic asylum that provided not only food, shelter and playfield but also a worthy home to infinite sparkles of life.

For some time, I sat speechless and exhausted, as if, an inner turmoil had withdrawn all my strength. Then slowly, with a deep sigh, I raised my crumbled body up and shuffled out. Outside, on the yard was lying my axe, as if, staring at me derisively. Before one could notice, I seized it in both my hands and flung it far out into the trash beyond.

•By Rabindra Nath Das
TGT (Eng), JNV, Salbani
PO-Dhanpur, Via-K.C.Pur
Dist-Mayurbhanj, PIN-757029
(Orissa)


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Rabindra Nath Das

Born on 20th April, 1965 in a scenic village 'Gopalpur' on the bank of river 'Subarnarekha' in Balasore district of Orissa, India. After completing his MA in English Lit. under Utkal University he joined as a senior Teacher (Eng) in a central govt. Higher Secondary School. At present he is editing a bilingual quarterly "The Blue Waves".(articles are invited for the same at bluewaves2009@ymail.com) He has published a collection of Short stories. Many of his stories have been published in different journals and News papers. Received 'state award as writer', 'Editor's Choices awards' and honours from several Literary societies of Orissa.

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  • Beautiful story with a powerful message. Loved the story. From your bio, your obviously a professional at this. I request you to read my stories 'The Lonely Bus Stand' and 'Mohiniattam' and give your professional feedback. Beginners like me could learn a lot from people like you.
  • A very good story. Please don't be apologetic about it being a simple story. Simplicity is the hardest to achieve. As for the Guava tree, well even we have one in our home, plus a jamun and two mango trees. They attract a lot of monkeys. We have a simple solution for the excess fruit. The hawkers approach us every year take away the fruits and pay us too. A win win situation eh?
  • Rabindra Nath Das
    Thanks Vivek. I agree with u that simplicity is harder than just being complex. But then simplicity should also include completeness and compactness. It should come out of maturity not from ignorance.Thank u once again for widening my view.
  • Second your thoughts on simplicity and smiling at the win-win :-)
  • Rabindra Nath Das
    Oh, Madhu! Thanks a lot. Would that simplicity were to win over complexity in all spheres of life!
  • I had just such a guava tree in my garden and your story brought it all back to life for me. Like Madhu says, simple every day events make great stories. Loved reading this one!
  • Rabindra Nath Das
    Thank u Shail for reading this simple story. May your guava tree bring a luxurious lush of fruits! And hope you wouldn't, henceforward, even cherish the idea of cutting it one day.
    Ravi
  • What a beautiful story :)
    Loved the sweet flow of emotions through the story. Every sentence held me gripped. The moment you had picked up the axe I could feel my heart wanting to stop you.
    Fantastic observations made this piece of fiction feel like non-fiction.

    Keep up the good work and good luck for the contest.

    Cheers!!
  • rabindranathdas
    Dear Chatterbox
    Thank u for sharing the emotions of the story and be with the narrator, also thanks for your geart love for the plants.
  • Rabindra, I agree with Megha and Manorama, this was simple, flowy and nice. A RD post like Mano said. I was brought up on plantations and wilderness till I was 10 and animals are dear to me, so this sensitive portrayal of the conflict and the tree winning was nice :-) .

    Great post !
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank u Anjana. I appreciate your love for the wild and the flora and fauna. I am always thrilled at the sight of it.
  • barnali
    Dear Rabindra:

    A beautifully written work with natural details, if I may say so. Wonderful description and upon the whole, a well written work. I wish you all the best for the contest and hope to read more such beautiful works from you. My five stars to you:-)

    Cheers!!
    Barnali
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank you Barnali. Your words will stand as a source of inspiration and they must eke out what is best in me in the days to come. Also mail your comments and suggestions on my next stories to my e-mail ID (rabinsun369@gmail.com)
    Yours
    Ravi
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  • rabindranathdas
    Dear Madhu
    Thaks a lot for suggestion.
    Ravi
  • mukidve
    A very "Reader's Digest" story..Lovely :)
    I like the way you have put across subtle messages without underlining them.Everything has to revolve around Man's convenience!And how fickle are the hands that nurture and then attempt to destroy!
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank u mukidve. It seems u have deep insight.
  • I liked the simplicity and that made the whole writing a good read.
    I wasn't sure of what would be the end when I was reading but you ended with a wonderful message and realization.
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank you Megha. I am inspired by your words.
  • What I liked -

    - the innocence in the story is evident.
    - sensitivity is beautifully highlighted.
    - realization at the end is poignant and well etched.
    - conceptualization of the story was good.

    Critique -

    Too many grammatical errors distracted my attention from the central storyline.
    Narrative could have been better.Here are some suggestions...

    Grammar /Rephrase -

    ----> became sick of them -- got tired of eating them ?
    ---->It seemed none could finish..-- no one or nobody.
    ---->half-eaten snippets on the ground under -- rephrase.
    ---->whoever guest visited us. -- whichever? or any..
    ---->Though all these tedious business cost -- grammar.
    ---->cut down the tree- a nip in the bud.-- already passed that stage in the story timeline.
    ---->chop up the tree -- you chop down a tree.
    ---->amazing lush of a tree-- ??
    ----> I woke up once for all-- :-))
    ---->Being overpowered once again-- by who?
    ---->hanging in snooze after a bellyful --rephrase.
    ---->The bats perched themselves safely - i think birds perch bats hang.
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank u Gyanban. I agree with u on some of the grammatical slips I commited. But some of the phrases you indicated are used so inorder to attain flow and an artistic finish. A direct sentence may be a grammatical model but if u give it a little twist it will attain art and elegance. That is what we want. Therefore, perhaps, someone has said that an artistic creation is like an ice-barg one fourth of which is visible and three fourth is under water.
  • That's a nice story Rabindra. I agree with Nishith and Madhu, this may lack thrills but has a huge heart. Many of the famous shorts are about mundane, simplistic things that we see in every day life. To me that's what makes shorts so good. It's not a grand 5 course meal (novels are), shorts to me are like Mom's cooking, like 'Chicken soup' series, like a deja-vu ; a nostalgic trip down the memory lane of something that happened right in my back yard guava or mango tree .

    Beautiful flow and language, fantastic short ! :-)
  • rabindranathdas
    Thanks, Maya, a lot. I agree with u on your comments on shorts as a whole.
  • Nashsingh
    Dear Rabindra

    Overall I liked the story. It was quite pleasing. As a reader (whose mind invents the story he reads) I will put my analysis here:
    The flow and grammar are almost perfect. The central story though quite sweet yet may not be ambitious or multi-layered. Perhaps, simplicity is its greatness. The story may also lack thrilling turns and twists for certain category of readers but it should appeal to most I think.
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank you Nishith. I must keep your comments in mind and try to apply them in my next story.
  • Lovely story....amazing language :)

    I loved the flow of the story a lot.
  • rabindranathdas
    Hi,
    Thank u a a lot for your kind comments. I would rather like to know your real name. Pl. intimate.
  • Haha...my real name is Vinita :)
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  • Hey where have you been ? :-)
  • Rabindra nath Das
    Sorry I have been away in some job. Now I am back. Thanks.
  • rabindranathdas
    The juxtaposition is something unique....lazy and pineapple. Does it carry
    any special meaning?
  • Rabindra,
    That's a beautiful story. My two cents :

    What I Liked :
    1. That was short-story 101 - specific goal(a loving tree was not a headache you wished to rid yourself of) ; short span ; show all the way , little to no tell
    2. Beautiful language, graphic descriptions and the climax -- an epiphanic mini play of a climax, with cats, bats, insets et al.

    Areas of potential improvement :
    To a thrill seeker the story may come across as simple, but simple every day events make a great short-story. This certainly did for me. So nothing I can think of for improvement..
  • rabindranathdas
    Thank you for your comments. Your inspiring words would certainly boost me up. Thank you once again.
    Yours ever
    R.N.Das
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